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Author: Ashitaka	Added: May 12 2002	Views/Reads: 3095/2202	Story vote: 0.00 (0 votes)
This sotry is not yet finished, I only want peoples reactions to my work.

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get ready to leave. "Aurora I have to see her, I love her.  Your too 
young right now you don't understand." says Axel as he sits next to 
Aurora and hugs her. "I am not too young.  I just think it's a dumb 
idea that's all.  But I'm not going to stop you so go and see her, 
she's probably waiting for you now." "Be good while I'm gone sis'. 
don't burn the cottage down." says Axel, smiling, as he leaves to meet 
Luna. "I won't." Aurora calls out after him. Axel walks through the 
forest for about fifteen minutes until he reaches a small, diplatated, 
old church in the glen.  He walks in the front door and sees Luna 
sitting in the front pew.  He walks up beside her and asks, "Is this 
seat taken?" Luna turns her head around and looks up as her eyes meet 
Axel's, she jumps up and throws her arms around his neck and kisses 
him.  "Oh Axel I thought you would never get here." Axel looks down at 
Luna's clothes and says; "I rather like these clothes on you better." 
"Oh Axel, this was the only way I could leave the castle.  Father won't 
let me leave the castle grounds.  So I dressed like a kitchen maid and 
left through the kitchen like I was going to the market." "Aurora 
thinks that we shouldn't see each other anymore.  I think she is scared 
that she will loose me to you." Luna sits down and motions for Axel to 
sits down too, "Oh Axel, tell her she doesn't have to worry anymore." 
"I don't understand.  Luna what's wrong?" says Axel as he takes her 
hands in his own. "Father has arranged for me to marry Lord Van.  Axel 
I don't want to marry him, but I think I love him too." "That is 
horrible.  How can you love him if you love me?" "I don't love him like 
I love you.  I love Van's looks, I love everything about you." "Run 
away.  Come live with me and Aurora." "I can't say yes right now.  I 
have to think. Is that ok?" "I can wait, and I understand." Luna 
suddenly turns her head to the window.  She motions for Axel to be 
quiet but follow her.  They get up and head to the window, coming down 
the path is Lord Van with several knights and Luna's horse. "Axel you 
have to leave, quick out the back door. Go." Axel kisses Luna once more 
and then runs out the back door just as the knights and Lord Van walk 
in the front door. "Ah Luna my love, what are you doing in those 
clothes and outside the castle walls?" says Van as he walks up to Luna 
and kisses her on the forehead. "I like this church.  It's quiet and 
simple here not like the church in the village.  What are you doing 
here?" "Your father knows that you left the castle and he sent me to 
fetch you. He is quite angry about you leaving. He thinks you left to 
see that Axel fellow." "Oh he does, does he!" With that Luna walks out 
of the church and gets on her horse, and she heads off from the church 
and to the castle before Van can even get on his own horse. 

*II* "Amara we have been walking for two days now, can't we stop and
rest for a while?  Look there is a nice big lake right over there." 
says Avis wearily. "Yes I guess your right Avis. Drake can you see the 
lake she is pointing to?" "Sure it's right over there, through the 
trees. We can stop for the night. I can catch some fish for us to eat." 


So they walk through the trees and sit on the edge of the lake. Amara
looks at the glassy surface on the lake and sees her reflection. Her 
face is smudged with soot and dirt, her hair is wild and dirty. She 
plunges her hands into the cool water and washes her face and her hair 
as best she can. Amara gets up and sees Drake trying to catch some fish 
and Avis is looking for wood to make a fire with.  Amara gets up and 
moves to a sandy part on the edge of the lake, the finds a good size 
flat rock and starts to dig a hole to build the fire in, she then 
gathers a bunch of stones and builds a circle around the pit.  Avis 
comes over and gets the pit ready to start the fire. Drake comes over 
with two medium sized fish and places them on a spit he fashioned out 
of some fallen branches, and then he lights the fire by reflecting the 
sun off his dagger and begins to cook the fish. Amara lays on her back 
by the fire and stares at the sky, which has turned a bright orange 
from the setting sun. She looks around at the clouds and she notice's a 
cloud of smoke rise from the trees just across the lake. She sits up 
and sees that the smoke is rising like it is coming out of a chimney. 
"Drake do you see that smoke over there?" says Amara pointing across 
the lake. "Yes I do, remember where it is across the lake, we will head 
that way in the morning. Here the fish is done, let's eat." The three 
of them sit around the campfire and eat their dinner.  Soon it is dark 
out and Amara and Avis have fallen asleep. Drake sits by the fire and 
watches lights from a house across the lake.  He knows someone lives 
there but he has a bad feeling about getting involved with those people 
across the lake.  Soon he decides he should go to sleep, he checks the 
fire once more to make sure it won't spread beyond the pit, and lays 
down on his back and watches the stars until he falls asleep. 
******************** Luna reaches the castle gate just as her father is 
mounting his horse.  He sees Luna and gets back off the horse. "Luna 
come here!" he says harshly and points to the ground in front of him. 
Luna rides up along side her father's horse and gets off, she stands in 
front of her father and says, "Why did you send Lord Van to come and 
find me?" "You can't do this anymore, you can't just leave Luna.  It 
isn't safe outside of these castle walls, and..." "It isn't safe inside 
these castle walls father." "And why are you dressed like a peasant 
girl?" "So no one would notice me, if I dress like the peasants they 
wont realize I'm not one of them. Oh but how did you know I was gone?" 
"One of my men saw you leave, they came and told me." "Well father, I 
would love to tell you why I left but it doesn't matter.  I'm tired I'm 
going to bed now." Luna runs off into the castle, as she gets to the 
door she turns back and sees that Lord Van has just come in the gates 
and is walking up to her father to talk.  She turns and runs up to her 
room. 

"Your majesty," says Lord Van, " Luna was down at the old peasant church
in the meadow, down by the woods.  I think she was meeting someone 
there.  I am worried for her safety." "Good lad, come let us eat and 
drink and talk about your marriage to Luna." "Yes sir." The King puts 
his arm around Van's shoulders and they both walk into the castle 
laughing. 

Luna walks through the balcony above the courtroom to get to her room;
she sees her father and Van walk into the courtroom out of the corner 
of her eye. She sees that they have serious looks on their faces. 'I 
wonder if Van told my father where I was' Luna thinks to herself as she 
ducks behind a pillar to hide from Van and her father's sight so she 
can listen. 

"Your majesty I can't shake the feeling that Luna was down at that
church to meet the peasant boy." Says Van as he sits on the stairs in 
front of the king's throne. 

"For her sake she better not have been down there to meet that boy, she
will marry you by her seventeenth  birthday." The king says sternly as 
he sits on the throne. 

"But King Anadyr...." 

"You can leave out the king Van." 

"But Anadyr her seventeenth birthday is in two weeks.  Don't you think
that is kind of soon and a lot of pressure that will be put on Luna?" 

"She will marry you in two weeks. I will send Margret to talk to her. 
She is more than likely up in her room very angry at both of us." 
"Margret come here." Anadyr bellows.  His voice booms through the 
halls. 

Margret walks into the throne room, "Yes your majesty." She bows her
head. 

"I want you to go and talk to Luna.  Tell her that she is to marry Van
in two weeks, she has no say in the matter." 

"Yes sir." Margret turns and as she is walking out of the throne room,
she hears something rustle and looks up at the balcony and sees Luna 
duck out from behind a pillar and run in the direction of her room. 
Margret picks up her pace.  Just as she reaches the top of the stairs 
and turns down the hall to Lunas room she hears Lunas door close. 

Just as Luna sits in her chair and picks up a book, Margret walks in her
room and sit opposite Luna on her bed. "I know you were listening to 
your father." 

Luna lays the book on her lap, "rats I was hoping no one would notice me
leaving." 

"Well since you know what I am supposed to say.... Why don't we just get
you cleaned up and ready for supper." Margret says smiling. 

"Ok Margret you run a bath, I'll pick out a dress to wear." 

**III** 

Axel walks sleepily into the kitchen and sits at the table, "good
morning Aurora." "Oh so you finally crawl out of bed, what time did you 
get home last night?" Says Aurora as she turns around and with her 
hands on her hips and a wooden spoon in her right hand. "I'm not sure, 
it was late though." Aurora sits at the table across from her brother; 
"I saw some smoke coming from the other side of the lake last night at 
sunset." Axel looks up and he has a concerned look on his face, "you 
didn't go to the other side of the lake to find out what it was did 
you?" "Oh no, I did go to get some fish for the soup that's I'm 
cooking, and I saw the fire and I came back into the house as quickly 
as I could." "No doubt whoever it was saw our fire.  They will probably 
come over to this side of the lake looking for food and shelter." 
"Can't we offer some food, there is lot's of soup here.  Maybe they 
will just ask for directions." "Well maybe I can run over to the middle 
of the lake and see if I can see them, that way I can watch them and 
see if they are dangerous or not." "I think that is a good idea Axel.  
I will stay here and finish......... Do you hear hoofbeats coming up 
the path?" Axel quickly gets up and runs to the window.  He pushes 
aside the curtains just as Aurora gets to his side. A woman comes 
riding up to the gate.  She gets off her horse, opens the gate and 
walks up the path to the front door. "Axel, who is that woman?" "It's 
Margret." "Who is she?" "She's Luna's Lady in Waiting." 

Margret knocks on the door.  Aurora opens the door, and lets the woman
walk inside. 

"Is something wrong with Luna? Margret?" Axel says, worried that
something has happened to his love. "Axel I'm not sure how to tell you 
this." "Oh no, what has happened?" "Luna is being forced to marry Lord 
Van on her birthday in two weeks." "She, She can't refuse?" Axel 
stammers. "No honey she can't, unless she is married before then. You 
know as well as everyone else divorce is not allowed in Avalon." "When 
can I see her?" "I will go and tell her you wish to marry her." "With 
all my heart I want to be her husband.  You will come back with and 
answer?" "I will return as soon as she has told me her decision." 
"Quickly go and ask her." Axel says all giddy and excited. Margret 
turns and leaves the house to return to the castle. Meanwhile Aurora 
has noticed that the smoke has begun to rise from across the lake. 
"Axel, the smoke is back." Axel quickly turns and runs to the cabinet 
and gets his telescope.  He runs to edge of the lake with Aurora at his 
heels.  He looks through the telescope and sees the people across the 
lake. "It's two girls I would say to be your age Aurora and one man I 
would say to be 17 or 18." "Can we go talk to them Axel?" "Wait for 
them to come to us ok." "Ok, they are probably going to the castle, 
they will come this way." "Right, we will wait right here for them." 
************* Amara sits by the edge of the lake skipping stones on the 
water. 


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