|The Void (standard:poetry, 245 words)|
|Author: White Rabbit||Added: Mar 07 2001||Views/Reads: 2136/0||Story vote: 0.00 (0 votes)|
|a poem i wrote at some unknown time...i don't remember anymore. Please critique!!! I need the feedback!|
I want, no, I need someone to trust To tell my deepest and darkest secrets to. To share my life with, Who will still love me for who I am. To take the veil from my eyes A veil of pain and suffering, Of a lifetime of sorrow and confusion But Iím too afraid Afraid of rejection A swirling muddy water carrying me away To no manís land, unable to turn back Unable to live. I hurt, I feel I hate everyone and everything around me All their phony smiling faces a façade, A wall between me and their hearts I feel a darkness in my soul, An emptiness, a void. I can try to mask the pain with cheer, But underneath, like a rotten foundation, It remains, growing, flourishing, destroying me. I hate myself for who I am, But Iím terrified of changing. Terrified of becoming someone Iím not, Or even worse, pretending to be. I can feel my pain, torturing me, Tearing me apart, Yet I do nothing to stop it, heal it. I canít, I wonít, itís too hard Iím not brave enough, not good enough I wish I could change and stop the pain I wish I could fill that emptiness. I cry, I cry my heart out for it to be filled. For someone to fill it with love, With happiness, with understanding, With compassion. Only then will I be complete. But until then, I wait, And I wait alone. Tweet
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